
After a time, the teacher began to interest for
Susan. He believes that she is very beautiful. The teacher began to talk with
Susan about literature before and after class. He recommended many books for
Susan. Initially the topics of the books were about fantastic literature of
Latin America. After the topics were about love histories. From these romantic
readings, Susan and Ricardo (the teacher's name), began to see more often, not
only in school and in the literature class, but also in places of the city, this allowed them to know
intimately. At first Susan did not grasp the message
that Ricardo gave her when he told of romantic literature and their lives,
because she was in a relationship with a schoolmate.

Susan wrapped handfuls of nervousness and
insecurity that often and good humor, as he in his fervent desire to discover
it, by making art in she, an unexpected brown envelope following reasons , both skins longed as each evening , a
conversation wrapped in art, hidden symphony of feeling, each of her five
senses will delight in the other unimagined, just him, only she for him,
reveling after smile, after the new story that brings to both her clumsy
behavior, with no claim to more passionately get carried away with the soul and
desire, he stopping every impulse to possess, to care tenderly and walk a true
and only time his white skin, a brown chocolate that comes wrapped accurate to
describe such an impression, Susan inadvertently spilled chocolate on his lips, her body shakes
and freezes temporarily after finding her warm skin, it seems that they were
looking for, looking to each other and kiss, just a causal kiss, smashing any scheme, leading to an insurgent
kiss extensions, worthy lovers hidden.
With the passing of the days the feelings
lodged in the heart of Susan and Ricardo did not wait to show what their mind and body craved daily and what was
initially an unexpected kiss became a reason to share a few minutes after
finishing the class with the pretext of supplementing explained on the
romanticism classic, but all could not stay the same Ricardo longed eagerly to
express the fervent love for his student, for it would expect the next
encounter with Susan and propose something she never would expect.

Over
time, Ricardo decided to rebuild his life in this small town working as a
carpenter. One day after work, Ricardo go to deliver an order to the owner of a
bookstore, when he arrived he felt something familiar, it was "Love and
Passion: A fantasy story", the book that years ago had given to Sussan. At
this moment Ricardo began to remember every his life. Oblivious to anything,
Ricardo ran with the book in his hands to the train station. From there he traveled
to London with the desire to find Sussan and revive their love story.
When he arrived to Sussan’s home, he took a moment to breathe and taking courage, then he knocked the door not knowing what would be found there. After a minute, the door opened slowly, revealing a young child. Ricardo asked a little confused shakily by Sussan Wills. Immediately the boy shouted, "Mom, look you at the door". A mixture of bitterness and confusion quickly enveloped the heart of Ricardo.
Very good job! I do prefer the change made to the end of the story, it was pretty intense and nicely delivered. I made some corrections as I noticed some mistakes on spelling, word order and tense consistency.
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Elkin Moreno